Neesierie Ex Member FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 May 31st, 2010 at 4:12am Print Post Here's the place to post comments on the second chapter. Are you liking it so far? Yours, Denise IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #1 - May 31st, 2010 at 4:38am Print Post I like it! Ed is probably taking Foster to keep him (Paul) out of trouble! Matt What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #2 - May 31st, 2010 at 10:22am Print Post Oh my! Denise.... blankie! what a lovely image!! Actually there are so many delightful little bits that stand out in this.. I love the two different Ed's that Alec sees..... sod it..I'm going to have to take my time, sit down with a notepad and pen and do a proper review .. That's the great thing about this site..... being able to add to reviews! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #3 - Jun 1st, 2010 at 11:06am Print Post Ed reading a smutty book! What an image! and Paul not understanding! Love the way this is working out. There are so many hints that we are in for a roller coater of a story here Denise! Great Stuff!! Louise I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #4 - Jun 1st, 2010 at 12:39pm Print Post Of course Ed Straker would understand where Foster would not have a clue! Spot on Denise! And I wouldn't expect Paul to know that smutt and romance are worlds apart. Grow up Paul!! Nice job Denise! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #5 - Jun 1st, 2010 at 2:46pm Print Post Well, there's a lot more to romance novels than sex scenes! But somehow I don't see Paul as a reader, do you? *snicker* And it is true that you can know a great deal about a writer from the way they write. Straker's just being his typical self and doing research! Glad you're enjoying the story! I think I've figured out the scene I was worried about. I'll do more with it today and post it. Yours, Denise IP Logged
dragon Ex Member Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #6 - Jun 1st, 2010 at 3:28pm Print Post Hmmm Paul as a reader ... well, yes and no. Test pilots are not stupid, but they tend to read technical stuff and non-fiction. I could see Paul keeping quiet that he also knows a lot about the 10th century, or 19th century warfare, or the history of avionics because he's read almost nothing else since he was 8. Smut/romance novels, no. I could also see him doing knitting or needle point in his off time (when not in the company of anyone else) except I think they tagged him with photography. Which means that the island may drag the photographer's eye out in him without native ladies to inspire. (I'd think he might actually get into the underwater photography thing.) You're giving me ideas, that's not good! LOL. d IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #7 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 4:46am Print Post Just read the next part! It is all about the coffee! The lady sure knows how to charm Ed! Matt What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #8 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 10:46am Print Post Thius is about Chapters 3 and 4... I'll delete it later if you put up a separate thread.! Love the scene with Paul at night, buthe best part is Ed and Denise... the gradual build up of the attraction, the walk on the beach in the moonlight... :. drool! I really liked his thoughts about retirement and growing roses and about the moon... and there are the hints again that Denise is not all she seems to be! A delightfully emotional story. Lovely! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK Writer's Block Reply #9 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 2:46pm Print Post No. I'm going to leave the thread right here. It's easier that way. And like Straker, I prefer easy! Glad you liked the latest. I had a very fun time last night writing. (As I'm sure you can tell!) I made Straker a bit older for this story, so that we wouldn't be the same age. (Or have me older than him! Gak!) So this story takes place sometime in the 1990's. Probably. : Denise IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #10 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 5:57pm Print Post And Paul still hasn't settled down! And Ed is a perfect gentleman! Nice job Denise! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #11 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 7:45pm Print Post OOOH Exciting! What is it with these islanders and where is the UFO and why does Leona (?) have an injured leg. and why....... Too many questions Denise.. hurry up and answer them!! Please! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #12 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 7:53pm Print Post Now, come on, Matt! With jobs like theirs, what are the odds of them ever settling down to wedded bliss? Ford might be able to do it. He's good at multitasking, and Sulu managed it while racing around the universe. But the Command Team? No way! Denise IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #13 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 8:03pm Print Post Hey come on Denise.... ALec settling down? no way.. far too selfcentred and flighty, Paul too egotistical, but Ed.. I can see him settling down with the right woman. All love and passion and bliss. he's a man of deep deep emotions..and they are the BEST! Go on....tell me you don't agree....I dare you!! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK Writer's Block - Ch. 2 Reply #14 - Jun 2nd, 2010 at 8:10pm Print Post Yeah, but he's the exception to the rule. And the only way he can carry it off is to 1) retire and then get married, or 2) marry someone who he can bring into SHADO to work with him. (Can you guess which option I'm using for the current story?) IP Logged