Write Rat MajorSHADO Research Offline Straker and his coffee. Posts: 356 Location: United States Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #45 - Apr 13th, 2011 at 1:23am Print Post Quote:The centriifuge doesn't have a nickname that I could find. The salad spinner? I was trying to find out Nasa's name for that machine. I'll take vomit comet out, Matt. That's not a minor quibble, that's definitely major. When you are in the middle of a plot, and there is a boo boo, you can lose the tension, sometimes the reader. So thanks Quote:You did a great job of building the tension in this chapter. Thank you, at some point I needed to go back to SHADO. Straker's about to be Quote:Can't wait for the end. Couple of chapters. IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #46 - Apr 13th, 2011 at 1:29am Print Post A suggestion, I would leave the Vomit Comet in and mention the zero g sim aircraft instead. Astronaut trainee's often get sick more from the zero g simulator than they do from the centrifuge. Just a thought. What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Colonel Offline Straker, somehow it's always about you. Posts: 990 Location: Fulton, MO Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #47 - Apr 13th, 2011 at 2:57am Print Post Loved his treatment of the reporters! Give 'em hell, Edward! The sky is not the limit; nor are the stars. WWW IP Logged
Librarian IAC Member Offline I may be blonde but... Posts: 657 Location: Washington (not DC) Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #48 - Apr 13th, 2011 at 4:10pm Print Post More complications. Lovin' it. If you only have one solution to a problem - you're not trying. IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #49 - Apr 13th, 2011 at 5:52pm Print Post Very nice insights into the thoughts of the Commander. And the plot thickens. This is shaping up very nicely! Will they get to him in time? What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Blue Shrew Lieutenant Offline Did I wake you, Alec? Posts: 55 Location: Alec's Bedroom Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #50 - Apr 14th, 2011 at 2:37am Print Post Loving all the twist and turn A great read IP Logged
Write Rat Major Offline Straker and his coffee. Posts: 356 Location: United States Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #51 - Apr 15th, 2011 at 9:48am Print Post Matt wrote on Apr 13th, 2011 at 5:52pm:Very nice insights into the thoughts of the Commander. And the plot thickens. This is shaping up very nicely! Will they get to him in time? No, Ed dies. IP Logged
Claire Captain Offline UFO the original and best! Posts: 122 Location: South East England Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #52 - Apr 15th, 2011 at 10:54am Print Post Write Rat wrote on Apr 15th, 2011 at 9:48am:Matt wrote on Apr 13th, 2011 at 5:52pm:Very nice insights into the thoughts of the Commander. And the plot thickens. This is shaping up very nicely! Will they get to him in time? No, Ed dies. Nooooooooo-oooooooooooooooo <sob> IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #53 - Apr 17th, 2011 at 2:42pm Print Post I'll be keeping an eagle eye out for it! So many good stories on the guild right now. It's awesome! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Write Rat Major Offline Straker and his coffee. Posts: 356 Location: United States Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #54 - Apr 17th, 2011 at 3:43pm Print Post Chapter done. Someone get Straker a bandage. My husband and I were looking at the info on the Disneyland Hotel, and he suddenly grinned. He then told me why. The epilogue suddenly manifested itself in his head. Ohhhhhh myyyyyy God. My husband is so goooooood at twists. Metaphorically speaking, that is. IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #55 - Apr 17th, 2011 at 4:02pm Print Post Write Rat wrote on Apr 17th, 2011 at 3:43pm:Metaphorically speaking, that is. *snicker* *grin* *howl* *laughter* I love it! I'll get to reading it a bit later and put some thoughts down then. My muse just slapped me up side the head and has me busy writing. She's so pushy, that one. What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #56 - Apr 17th, 2011 at 5:39pm Print Post Ouch! Poor Ed! Very intense chapter. I think I might know who broke down the door. What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Blue Shrew Lieutenant Offline Did I wake you, Alec? Posts: 55 Location: Alec's Bedroom Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #57 - Apr 18th, 2011 at 2:45am Print Post Another great chapter a few mistakes with (") and those ever peskie (a) and (an) I will send them to you Poor Edward another suite down the drain. IP Logged
Librarian IAC Member Offline I may be blonde but... Posts: 657 Location: Washington (not DC) Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #58 - Apr 18th, 2011 at 2:48am Print Post I thought I caught the quotes issues - oh well. Damn those pesky quotes. « Last Edit: Apr 19th, 2011 at 5:45am by Librarian » If you only have one solution to a problem - you're not trying. IP Logged
Blue Shrew Lieutenant Offline Did I wake you, Alec? Posts: 55 Location: Alec's Bedroom Re: The Rabbit's Paw comments Reply #59 - Apr 18th, 2011 at 3:47am Print Post Quote:See, that's the superior quality beta we have. fluffs up mouse gray hair (squints to read text) IP Logged
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