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Oct 24th, 2011 at 9:06pm
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Got it started at least  Wink
  

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Reply #1 - Oct 24th, 2011 at 10:00pm
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Oh. that is way too funny! The dog from The Square Triangle?? Roll Eyes Love it! Smiley
  

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Reply #2 - Oct 25th, 2011 at 12:31am
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I always thought it was odd that Foster simply assumed that Sultan would be able to just track the alien.  Huh
  

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Reply #3 - Oct 25th, 2011 at 3:56am
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Really like it so far -- which is saying a lot, because I'm no dog lover.  Tongue  How soon will we get more?

(Oh, BTW, abso-tively loved the image of Sultan slobbering on the Commander!)  Grin
  

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Reply #4 - Oct 25th, 2011 at 11:13pm
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Part two is up.  Roll Eyes
  

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Reply #5 - Oct 26th, 2011 at 2:30am
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Part three is up - working on the epilogue.

The epilogue is up, but I'm debating as to whether or not it adds anything but a downer. Let me know what you all think.  Huh
  

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Reply #6 - Oct 26th, 2011 at 8:21am
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I think the epilogue is a perfect ending to the story.  Loved the speech.  Loved the image of puppies running about underfoot at a memorial service.  Loved the thought of Sultan's legacy continuing to protect Earth.  Wonderful short short, Deb!  Smiley
  

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Reply #7 - Oct 27th, 2011 at 2:51am
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The epilogue is perfect! Don't change a thing. The fact that we know that Sultan passes, only makes him that much more special. Cry Smiley

I always thought Straker could deliver a good eulogy. Wink

Fantastic story, Deb. Bravo! Smiley
  

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Reply #8 - Nov 21st, 2011 at 11:27am
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There's absolutely no worth to this story and I feel it should be removed at once.




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P.S. I'd never slobber on the Commander. Scratch him until he nearly bled to death and cause an infection in the resulting wound, yes. Slobber, no.
  
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Reply #9 - Nov 21st, 2011 at 4:35pm
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Sultan likes cats - he told me so himself. He just wishes they would learn to speak proper dog.   Grin
  

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Reply #10 - Nov 21st, 2011 at 11:16pm
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Sam speaks dog, with a Siamese accent of course. Wink

(Sam thinks Ivy is the cat's meow.  Kiss)
  

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Reply #11 - Mar 30th, 2012 at 10:31pm
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Writer's Notes: I don't normally do writer's notes but the boards have been so dead...

I have a dog. And the challenge was for a 'four-footed hero'. (I'm surprised nobody has written a story about a heroic rodent, but one might show up.  Wink )

I have a habit of starting stories in the middle and this one's no different - we start with Nils and Sultan waiting to start on their first search for SHADO then backtrack to find out how Nils (a lowly SHADO security guy - AKA red shirt) ended up with the dog from Square Triangle.

And there were some interesting issues with the Square Triangle - Foster's assumption that the dog would be able to follow the alien's trail despite all the strange people and the trauma of losing his human partner was a bit of a stretch even when I saw the episode the first time. So some backstory for Sultan was in order - a partially trained (and highly capable) search dog would fit the bill.

And of course Jackson's ahead of everybody in recognizing what a treasure SHADO has stumbled onto - and sending Sultan to look for Straker... let's say that Jackson has a devilish sense of humor.  Roll Eyes

Nils isn't a Control Room operative - I wanted someone for whom being called into Straker's office implied being called on the carpet. Someone who only knew Straker by reputation so Straker's orders for creating a SAR corps for SHADO would be a surprise..

On real Search and Rescue dogs - one of the hallmarks of SAR dogs is their capacity for play - and searching is the bestest game ever created, no matter how seriously the humans take it. And the relationship of human and dog in SAR is a true partnership.
  

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Reply #12 - Mar 31st, 2012 at 5:49pm
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This was a great story, and I enjoyed reading your thoughts on it. If time permits I can get back to my time travel story (and drum up some business for the forum).  Wink
  

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Reply #13 - Mar 31st, 2012 at 7:39pm
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts while writing this story!  I thoroughly enjoyed it and can tell that you researched well before starting out.  I'm a cat person myself, but couldn't figure a way to write a different sort of story about a cat and the commander when Pam's kept intruding saying it had already been done!  Wink  That said, I really liked Sultan and the many wonderful images you gave us through the story.  BTW, why don't you write behind-the-scenes on your stories?  Huh
  

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Reply #14 - Apr 1st, 2012 at 2:51pm
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Usually when I'm done with a story, I'm anxious to move on to the next one. I've also had this working theory that the story shouldn't need a lot of background explanations. (But since people seem so interested in the logic behind the choices, I think I'll start writing up notes anyway.)  Wink

And yeah, Pam's cat stories have created a very high bar for cat hero stories.
  

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