Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK In Training Reply #90 - Aug 28th, 2010 at 11:17am Print Post Very nice chapter Matt. like the narrative parts where you go into greater detail about what is happeneing.. Natirof, Straker etc. It makes it more defined for the reader and really pushed the action forward. So, lucky Jen..a hand on her back... ahh.. daydreaming here. I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #91 - Aug 28th, 2010 at 7:51pm Print Post Yeah, Jen is a lucky lady at that! I suppose I should get cracking on chapter eight, Matt has still got to face that type 3 UFO and there is that Russian Alfa to worry about. This could get ugly! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK In Training Reply #92 - Aug 29th, 2010 at 6:56am Print Post Wow! There's so much action, I can hardly catch my breath! I gotta say, I'm glad Straker's a crack shot! And Matt's doing very well on Skydiver. I hope he/you make it out of there alive! : IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #93 - Aug 29th, 2010 at 3:11pm Print Post Matt's out of torpedoes! Blub,blub,blub........ What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK In Training Reply #94 - Aug 29th, 2010 at 3:49pm Print Post Shouldn't that be 'glug, glug glug' ? I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #95 - Aug 29th, 2010 at 5:26pm Print Post You're right Louise! Glug,glug,glug....help! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #96 - Aug 30th, 2010 at 2:58am Print Post The next bit is up for chapter eight. What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Guina Ex Member Re: FDK In Training Reply #97 - Aug 30th, 2010 at 6:45am Print Post Hi Matt, I like how genuine the submarine "tawk" sounds, you've got that down pat, really! IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #98 - Aug 30th, 2010 at 8:20pm Print Post The dialogue for the sub sequences is from "Crimson Tide", "The Hunt for Red October" and "Red Storm Rising", as well as friends who either drive subs or serve on them for real. I read a lot of Tom Clancy. What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK In Training Reply #99 - Aug 30th, 2010 at 8:23pm Print Post Oh I love Tom Clancy. such good stories..Rainbow 6..wonderful! I'll review this story properly later Matt, ( doing Glitch for Guina at the moment!) I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #100 - Aug 30th, 2010 at 8:43pm Print Post I like the Jack Ryan series, although I haven't read all of them. "Red Storm Rising" was a very complicated but awesome read. What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK In Training Reply #101 - Sep 5th, 2010 at 8:28pm Print Post I do like the part with Ed and Jen.. very sensitively handled. and nice to see Ginny and Matt back together! Nice stuff !.... I was initially worried about Ed and Jen.. but you are doing it very nicely! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #102 - Sep 5th, 2010 at 9:26pm Print Post The biggest problem I thought I would run into was the age difference, 12 yrs. Jen is 36 and Ed is 48 here. I made a mistake in chapter two and had her down for thirty two. This story is set late in 1986. I liked the pillow talk too! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK In Training Reply #103 - Sep 8th, 2010 at 9:07am Print Post Epilogue Very nice inded. Love the conversations.. more detailed and informative. good part with Matt appreciating the necessesity to keep somethings a secret. And a cliff hanger of an ending.. or is there more to come in the epilogue? Excellent work Matt! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK In Training Reply #104 - Sep 8th, 2010 at 12:55pm Print Post More to come, I'll get to it later today! (I hope) Louise, what aspect of Ed and Jen had you worried? Age difference or something else? What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged