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Reply #45 - Aug 22nd, 2010 at 7:24pm
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See.. It was a good idea to do the letter!

Gulp.
Poor Virginia!

Good job we know that Matt is still alive then, or I'd be crying over my computer.. - not good for the circuits!

Nice work Matt.
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Reply #46 - Aug 22nd, 2010 at 7:29pm
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Lightcudder wrote on Aug 19th, 2010 at 4:04pm:
You need to do some serious grovelling now Matt! Shocked


That was some pretty serious grovelling!  :Smiley
  

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Reply #47 - Aug 23rd, 2010 at 4:05am
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See?  I was right.  The contents of the letter were superfluous.  It was enough that she read it and that she cried.  Having the contents there ruined it for my imagination.  :Smiley

So, tell me.  What are the aliens up to now?  Huh
  
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Reply #48 - Aug 23rd, 2010 at 1:13pm
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Mixed reviews, oh well. :Smiley I could always just give pieces of the letter in the final draft? Undecided

The baddies are up to no good, and they're coming back. Guess what's following that American sub, it ain't Santa Claus! Cheesy
  

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Reply #49 - Aug 23rd, 2010 at 2:25pm
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Sorry, Matt.  The final decision is yours, you know.  Just thought you'd want to know how it struck me.  A lot of writers these days don't give their readers credit for any creativity of their own.  In most respects, they have a point.  But I'm used to having some space to imagine in the stories I read.  And I like that.  (But I may not be considered an average reader!)  :Smiley

No worries.  It's a great story!  And I'm still on the edge of my seat.  So go write Matt out of this crisis!  Wink
  
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Reply #50 - Aug 23rd, 2010 at 2:35pm
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Thanks Denise, you know I always appreciate an honest response. Smiley I am toying with the idea of only reveling portions of the letter in Ginny's thoughts in the final draft some internal dialogue as to how it affected her instead of the text itself. Wink

Anyway Matt has to risk detection in order to save an American sub! Rig torpedoes fully ready! Cheesy
  

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Reply #51 - Aug 23rd, 2010 at 6:34pm
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Chapter 4 id done and pulled into one post! Wink Onward to chapter 5. Smiley

"Now let's see if he can hear us." :Smiley

  

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Reply #52 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 2:33pm
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Okay, added a bit more to chapter five, right now in the calm before the storm! Shocked

I need to make a dramatic climax here, I need some more greenies and I only have one left! :Smiley
  

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Reply #53 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 4:38pm
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More posted to chapter five!
  

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Reply #54 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 5:16pm
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Damn it, Matt!  Let Ginny at her!  Angry  I want to see her get hers!  Angry Angry  You know Straker won't mind!  Wink

BTW, great save in the sub!  It felt like a scene right out of Red October.  (That's a compliment, not a criticism!)  Cool
  
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Reply #55 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 6:28pm
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That would be a very bloody scene indeed! Shocked I think my Ginny is feeling a bit like her dark universe counterpart right now. Wink

I may just let her have her revenge! Cheesy
  

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Reply #56 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 6:31pm
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Just think -- it would be therapeutic.  And cheer her right up!  Cheesy
  
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Reply #57 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 8:57pm
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Great stuff as usual Matt. I like Ginny's anger and desire for revenge. And now Mattt is at the dome.. hmm... what is going to happen next I wonder.
And will Ed get the info he needs?

  

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Reply #58 - Aug 24th, 2010 at 9:47pm
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Chapter 5 is done, now I've got to turn up the heat for chapter six, we still have one UFO that is MIA and an unknown number of baddies at HQ. Shocked

Hopefully this will turn into a wild ride! Cheesy

Ginny just might get her revenge, but it will be bittersweet. :Smiley
  

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Reply #59 - Aug 25th, 2010 at 2:43am
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Good work, Matt!  Enjoyable dialogue in the dome as they work.  And Straker certainly was brave to beard the lioness in her den, so to speak.  :Smiley
  
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