Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK About Face Reply #30 - Jul 28th, 2010 at 4:09pm Print Post Chapter 2 This is not going to be a long review.. there’s not a great deal of action in this chapter, but its a great chapter all the same! I love the description of Cait, and poor Ed having to restrain himself... hints at an unhappy childhood here. – potential for future stories I think I like the way he questions his own wisdom – guilt and remorse again as in Face Off. And the regrets; at actually having asked her out, and at the fact that any relationship could not survive due to his work. But also the gladness; that he has replaced his beloved mural that has been a constant reminder of their time together, and that, despite his misgivings, she has arrived and it is too late to forestall her. A gentle, enjoyable meal together with no pressure... until; he covers her hand with is ( I love the line... ‘and it trembled’) A delicate intimate meeting, calm and with the softest hints of passion in the phrases; ‘irresistible grin’ ‘lightly touched her cheek’ ‘shivers throughout her body’ ‘ a gentle meeting of lips’ Back to reality; ‘Straker,’ he answered a little grimly.......... ‘I’m on my way.’ Duty calls. As always. Lovely. I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #31 - Jul 28th, 2010 at 4:49pm Print Post Thanks for the review! This story is going to be extremely complex. In fact, I'm wondering if I may need a third story to fit it all in. But we'll see how it goes. There is just so much to cover. And I haven't even revealed why her ex is giving her trouble! (That one's a doozy!) IP Logged
Lightcudder Colonel Offline Trust no one. Posts: 1311 Location: Here. When you least expect it Re: FDK About Face Reply #32 - Jul 28th, 2010 at 4:56pm Print Post I love complex stories!! and maybe a trilogy? Fantastic! I need some air. WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK About Face Reply #33 - Jul 28th, 2010 at 5:23pm Print Post Does Ed come to her rescue, like the knight in shining armor? A trilogy? Cool! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #34 - Jul 28th, 2010 at 9:40pm Print Post Um, no, Matt. Actually, he's the problem. It'll all make sense when I get there. IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK About Face Reply #35 - Jul 28th, 2010 at 10:08pm Print Post Ooooo! Now I'm hooked! Shades of the past????? I'm looking forward to this! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK About Face Reply #36 - Jul 31st, 2010 at 2:46pm Print Post The lady is quite simitten I think! I see the swoom meter going into overload, again! (Darn, I just got this thing fixed!) Go Ed and Cait! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #37 - Jul 31st, 2010 at 3:54pm Print Post Yeah, well. I'm rather forced into making their relationship intense by circumstance. Not only has he spent the past 13 years wanting her, but she's been dreaming of him (she just doesn't know it!) I'm actually rather surprised that they haven't fallen into bed together yet! Shall we attribute it to Cait's common sense or Straker's iron will? You decide. IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK About Face Reply #38 - Jul 31st, 2010 at 4:26pm Print Post I can see that! Ed's a gentleman. It took six weeks from the first date in my storyline! The longer that monment is held off the better the story! What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #39 - Jul 31st, 2010 at 6:06pm Print Post I couldn't agree more! Sexual tension is everything! IP Logged
Matt Colonel Offline Everyone at SHADO drinks coffee! Posts: 2391 Location: Coventry, RI Re: FDK About Face Reply #40 - Jul 31st, 2010 at 10:10pm Print Post And your taking it to the nth degree here, very nice work! And how old is the daughter? Hmmmm... What do you mean, we're out of coffee! WWW IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #41 - Jul 31st, 2010 at 10:54pm Print Post Stay tuned for further details! IP Logged
dragon Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #42 - Aug 2nd, 2010 at 5:20pm Print Post Oh, my. That's a definite ow. And it will be owier if there's a possibility of confused genetics. Yipe! Poor Cait. (For the rest of her life? She planning on it being short? I hope not. Usually the non custodial parent is only obligated until the child reaches majority unless there's a health issue of some sort that would preclude the child becoming independent. Only knowing this from the outside.) And why isn't Cait custodial? Inquiring minds want to know. looking forward to more. <g> (as to his gentleman-ness, you can tell nothing from the Skulls. There were extenuating, external influences. LOL) d IP Logged
Neesierie Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #43 - Aug 2nd, 2010 at 7:28pm Print Post As a woman who's been through divorce and raising kids on her own, as well as a mother to a woman who is now doing the same, I can say with experience that you never get rid of the ex as long as there's kids involved! Because even if they hate him (which my kids do) they still end up inviting him to special days: graduations, weddings, new babies, etc. It never ends!!!!!!! IP Logged
dragon Ex Member Re: FDK About Face Reply #44 - Aug 2nd, 2010 at 8:52pm Print Post Ah. Well, my parents solved that one not getting divorced until I was an adult and then living in two different states with texas between them. LOL. And the stint in Okinawa ... Dad, not Mom. IP Logged
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