Drat... I had actually thought of doing a story about John!!!!   This is great!
Is he dreaming...Nah... what is going on!!

I'm liking this, and who is in Ginny's past? Inquiring minds want to know! 

I just read that part, leave me in there by all means! And Ginny with her little baby, how sweet! (Matt wipes a tear away)

Good job!

Just read the next part, leave it to the greenies to spoil a party.

I forgot to mention, Ed's comment to Ginny in the last part was very sweet!

Kids Stuff
1.
I thought Ed was dreaming at the beginning, as he did, and you kept us thinking that until  - was abruptly awake -
He knows that it wouldn't be his son, but stillwants to treat himself to the pleasure of spending time with John, instead of doing as he should and calling security... not very sensible Ed, but we'll forgive you!.
And then the  mystery continues with Ford's call!

2
A lovely scene with children in the Control room... are the children in 'control'? Is that the aim of this? to have the children affect the staff so much that they can no longer operate effectively? Will Ed be able to cope with losing John again? will he have to make another life-or-death decision about the  children?

3
Virginia... that was so sad and Ed's reaction was perfect. 
and White's 'the small of them reminds me of my daughter' ( the crayons) absolutely spot on. there are so many smells thatremind me of when my children were little (Infacare babybath for one!) and wax crayons have a unique smell of their own.
And then there is the revelation that these are lost children. but they have been found - will they have to lose them again?
This is going to be sad.....
Straker felt bereft.... - but he knows that it is not his son.. How can you stay so calm Ed!! and he has a responsibility to the base.. Question of Priorities again??  Getting worried here!

4
Lunch in the cafeteria.... I can imagine it!!
But duty calls.....
The art of the bluff... I wouldn't want Jackson involved in this either! >
'These few hours may be all we'll get'     I love the way Ed has accepted this. (although I hate the phrase 'quality time'.. I think he might have just said 'time'... all time spent with these children will be precious)
I really can't see this ending happily.......

But I'm desperate to read the next part!

I know. !
Chapter 3

'The gifts from the past' this is the first hint that they are more than just illusion, that there may be something good about all this. Ayshea;'My mind doesbn't really have much of a chance to express its concerns, because my heart is so happy... wonderful
and the thought that any price was worth these hours...

The chess game;  lovely, but with a further hint that all is not as it seems. and maybe there is going to be a happy ending after all!
'Wouldn't that be a better example of my being the best?'  On my... where is this leading?

I love the confrontation with Henderson and Straker's continued bluff. He has changed his mind from the beginning of the story, duty no longer calls. and he accepts that security will be coming, in the morning.
Then the question of what those who set this scenario up, wanted?
I love the thought of him watching his son sleeping.
ANd Virginia's comment; 'I never got chance to say good bye to her before.' Hmmm ........thinking here now! 

ANd we end with Straker doing everything possible to protect them, surrounded by his staff
(Ayshea.... holding his hand  )

And they stood there, protecting the children....

Fabulous

This is outstanding Denise, once again I find myself on the edge of my seat!

Oh by the way, I'm taking vicious notes on Ginny being a Mom for use later!