A longer review now!!
Prologue;
What a great start!! Love it when a story beings with such tension! And we are dragged along wondering who it is who is so angry and why!
Poor Alec.. getting in her way..
Nicely done, informing us that it is Ed who has upset GInny through Alec's comment. Paul and his big mouth.... yes indeed.
The conversation runs well, little touches.. 'wistfully', 'pensively' the details of
Ginny looking over at Alec as he stands... brings greater depth to the story and makes us part of it..I can see Alec, geting up, looking at Ginny to see if she is going to be able to cope!
A very promising and intriguing start Matt!
Chapter 1
And I was expecting Ed to be apologising to Ginny.. but no..straight into Command Mode..lovely! Again. a nice touch. to keep the reader interested, and make us want to read on.
Totally new plot idea Matt!! Very well done indeed! You realy have excellent story lines!!
Quote:“In that case,” said Ed in very measured tones. “You will prosecute him with extreme prejudice. Do I make myself clear?”
Very nice. Very Ed.
Great narrative about the Russian side of the story.. good details, again,. natural and 'comfortable' conversation.
I like the little 'aside' threat to Virginia (Too bad about the woman...)
Nice to see Alec taking control
Quote:“So here is the game plan,” began Alec without preamble
He often gets ignored! and treated as if he is incompetent (without any justification really!)
There are some clever and subtle hints as to a romantic liaison later, as well as insidious threats and intrigues!
An excellent start Matt!! Looking forward to more!
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