I tried looking up your story under the Library section by title and author and couldn't find it. Where is it located on the site. Thanks!

Hi Regina!

I enjoyed them as well - techno-nerd that I am, I loved your upgrades to SHADO.

I wonder - is 'Three Days' a direct sequel to 'Responsibility', or are they separate strands? I look forward to developments!

Regina,

Forgot to add my thanks for making Henderson more than a one-dimensional cranky ass. His character on the show was more antagonist than anything else and it carries over into fanfic as well. Nice to see someone else paint the character with some humanity.
Moo

I had some problems with content based more on personal preference than anything else. I don't see Straker as physically and mentally frail as he is in both pieces. I noticed you mentioned a firefight it would be more convincing if we could read about it and how Straker was involved and how he was affected. I think he would chop heads off if he was being drugged (even for his own good) without his knowledge. He comes over too laid back to me. Its hard for me to think Paul would approach Ginny about her possible attraction to Ed considering we know she and Paul had a thing going.  I think Straker would be a lot more firm about accepting advice from the docs.  We see him skip a meal in priorities but I think his discipline wouldn't allow him to do that often. I think his fragility lies  more in loneliness and relationships. Alec is closest to him but we don't see him confide or ask for support with Johnny in priorities. He screws up when it involves women. He breaks his own rules on security by not turning in jo when she whacks him on tbe head in responsibility seat..
The bit about st johns wort might have solved my curiosity what he was growing in those odd canisters on his shelf 😀😀😀 I use a lot of alternative meds too. You must be into them? Straker spraying bach flower remedies😀😀😀
I portray Straker off strict canon but I try to always retain his core. Strangely the stories I have done that are very offbeat like Straker meeting the rabbit in rabbits paw get the most feedback, but I am very careful to provide reasons if he does something out of kilter like take his coffee black (Ed B liked his coffee black) or suddenly take up knitting 😀😀😀. Then you imo have to give a believable reason why he does it.
The stuff I think you are strong on is the humor between Ed and Alec and his own sense of humor.  i like your pace and you have a gentle easily readable style. I'd consider creating a char possibly a pesky one who lectures Straker about smoking and chemicals and use your own knowledge of herbs etc. Just experiment with writing.
As for the apple green uh..😀 My own feeling would be colors based on psychology. The way colors were used in prison to calm inmates.
More than anything else a writer should be true to his or her own interpretation but I personally find that if I go too out of the lines readers don't like it.
Regina glad you're back here. 🏠 You can always write me now that my email is active again. (Hugs new smartphone) 😁